Hey ya'll!

I'm currently doing Protfolio Project 5 on the Games Designer course, where I have to create a Story Bible for a game based on a Sci Fi franchise, and I would like someone to have a look at it and point out any glaring errors or omissions. I am also massivly over the page count as I really cant fit all the information required, including images into a 10-15 page document. The brief states that being over isnt bad, so long as the information is relevant, but any help cutting that down would be appreciated.

The Story Bible is for an RTS game based on Star Trek, and has three factions with a small campaign as well as a multiplayer mode. I belive I have been as comprehensive as possible, but would really appreciate if someone could give it a look over. Please reply if you are interested.

Thank you for your time.